Comment on So You've Created a Mary Sue by WickedWriter

Okay, I need serious help, here! My OC's, Akamai (ah-KA-maee), Rebecca, Valerie, Penny, Chrystal, Madison, and Rachel each have Mary-Sue qualities.

My Wild Kratts OC problems:

Chrystal has an insanely tragic past. Her mother is a criminal, so Chrystal was sent to an orphanage. She almost got adopted by a man who beat her until she bled, yelled at her until she cried, and locked her in a dark basement with two rabies-infected pit bulls. Plus, her sister, Rachel, died. She also has an unexplained power: speaking to animals.

 She is a bit of a bookworm. She is always wearing a silver heart locket that her adoptive dad gave her. She will often respond to obvious statements with 'Thank you, Captain Obvious, tell me something I don't know!' Fact is, she's a little too Rainbow Dash-ish. Temperamental, brave, strong, but will turn on you in a split second.

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

My Star Trek: The Next Generation OC problems:

Akamai has color-changing eyes, because she's an android and the eye color indicates which mode she's in, but they're usually either blue or yellow. Her name is Hawaiian. It means smart or clever. Yet, she is NOT from Hawaii. But, she can't figure out what emotions are.

Rebecca has a tragic past, also. Her mother was shot and killed by a Romulan when she was 5, so she holds a deep grudge against them. She is bossy, impulsive, and often acts on instinct. She also has a bit of a frenimie relationship with my other OC, Valerie.

Liz is this nerdy, 13 year old girl with a thing for techno-babble. She has long, wavy, dark brown hair, green eyes, and a freckled face. Her outfit doesn't match the time period, though. She wears glasses, and has on a dark green hoodie over an olive green t-shirt(she usually wears the jacket tied up around her waist). She also wears a baggy pair of boot cuts, black sneakers, and is always wearing a watch. That doesn't sound right for the year 2370, but I don't know what else to dress her in! She is a bit clumsy, but she is super smart! She has a hard time socializing, though.

Hope you can help me! I really need it!