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Comment on A is for Algebra by ~jeconner

I don't usually bother with the whole Poetry section, but this is rather interesting. I actually enjoyed reading it.
I think that giving letters instead of names to each character is a wonderful device... and it takes away the personalities that we associate with certain namesm so that the reader focuses more on what is said and done than their preconceptions.
Anyway... cool. :thumbsup:

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I hate A. He was my 10th grade teacher with absolutely no patience or teaching ability whatsoever. I feel for D.
This is a fantastic concept. As you have the impartial critique setting on I will not give you my full analysis, however, your capatalization is either inconisitent or ambiguos in its intention and I suspect it is the former. Although not capatalizing the first words of sentences is generaly not suggested I can understand completely as to why you would do that in this poem, but as I said I think a more consistent manner would go far. I must stop myself here lest I breach your request. If you do decide that you wish for a full critique then I would gladly oblige you, either way... Good Day ~* DP

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Yes, yes. I know. I'll go back and capitalize. I've been lazy for far too long. ;)

A full critique is always welcome. I'd be interested to hear your thoughts.
Absolutely awesome. I love that you stuck with D throughout her entire day. The teen e is an excellent touch.

My fave bit: D looks disgusted and barely recoups,/her skin a green avocadoes would die/for."

:-D
I don't usually bother with the whole Poetry section, but this is rather interesting. I actually enjoyed reading it.
I think that giving letters instead of names to each character is a wonderful device... and it takes away the personalities that we associate with certain namesm so that the reader focuses more on what is said and done than their preconceptions.
Anyway... cool. :thumbsup:
For some reason I'm digging that nurse N :boing:
oh this is awesome... took me so long to read it... soory :ashamed:... The C Show is ingenious... but the whole thing reads so smoothly... :thumbsup::thumbsup:
The C Show, yay! You're awesome, and thanks.

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