Comment on Premonition Blues by dead-now
It really is a bit forcefully making a statement, I admit. I actually whipped out the last half in mere minutes, so I was hoping that putting it up here would allow for people to provide suggestions on how to tighten this up a bit.
I appreciate you always taking the time to consider the work that I put up. Your suggestions are also very much appreciated, so thank you very much.
I appreciate you always taking the time to consider the work that I put up. Your suggestions are also very much appreciated, so thank you very much.
Ahh, yes. I see exactly what you mean. Allowing the absence of people to manifest itself through the actual absence from the piece is quite a lovely tactic. I suppose I was trying a bit too much to make it 'shocking' or blunt.
Well said, mate. Let me mull over this for a while and try to figure out how to get it to work.
Well said, mate. Let me mull over this for a while and try to figure out how to get it to work.
Rockin'.
I think 'show don't tell' is a pretty awesome poetry tactic in any situation.
I think 'show don't tell' is a pretty awesome poetry tactic in any situation.
I agree. I greatly appreciate your input.