Comment on Words, Words, Words by thespes

Ha! Next story I write, I'll see if I can include rocket launchers and robots. Thanks for you input! I don't mind that you didn't like Jon. I actually wrote this for an assignment for school. We were supposed to be parodying Candide, and while this is not a true parody, I do model Jon off of Candide, who is a rather despicable character.
Dialogue has always been a problem with me. I'll try to work on that.
Thanks for your input!!