Hello there, ^^ hopefully I can answer your questions and that you are okay with critique. First of all I will say that I think this is a very cool concept but it does have a few flaws here and there. It's nothing that can't be easily ironed out however.
1) First of all I do this it is a quite original prompt, although the situation of a guy calling another guy gay which is followed up by a good purse slapping, is slightly overdone. It is however good that you can be inspired so easily and could write a whole short story out of that one line.
2) I really don't think there is enough information given, at the start it is assumed that they were high-schoolers or just normal people and then you mentioned "The HQ," and that the reason that Jeff was crossdressing was becuase he was a secret agent. This however is really not elaborated so it just ends up being redundant. You don't know why they are doing what they are doing and why places need infiltrated. The secret agent plot really needs to be brought up earlier and explained fully. To improve on this you could add a paragraph before the first line of speech when with Scott's help Chad limps into the HQ and complains that he hasn't been in this much pain after some of his most dangerous assignments. You could either do this or just change it so it doesn't have agents at all, and Jeff cross dresses becuase he likes to.
3) Yes you did, your variety of words was very good.
4) Yes there is a few things, "Sometimes HQ needs the person who goes in to be a woman and the person who does the actual work to be a man simply because a woman can get in, but if they turn into a man they'll never be suspected." This sentence somehow doesn't make very much sense, I think it is becuase there are so many things going on it. Maybe if you changed it to something along the lines of: Sometimes the job demands it, people generally trust women more than men. Also it is a good disguise, once he is inside he can turn can turn back into a man and the security won't know it is him." You also basically repeat everything you'd said in the next sentence. You could make this better by maybe just adding a small sentence that says: "Jeff is short and thin, so he is perfect for the job."
Anyway overall I did enjoy this, hopefully my comments did not come across as rude or that I was ripping your piece apart. Keep writing and improving! ^^
1) First of all I do this it is a quite original prompt, although the situation of a guy calling another guy gay which is followed up by a good purse slapping, is slightly overdone. It is however good that you can be inspired so easily and could write a whole short story out of that one line.
2) I really don't think there is enough information given, at the start it is assumed that they were high-schoolers or just normal people and then you mentioned "The HQ," and that the reason that Jeff was crossdressing was becuase he was a secret agent. This however is really not elaborated so it just ends up being redundant. You don't know why they are doing what they are doing and why places need infiltrated. The secret agent plot really needs to be brought up earlier and explained fully. To improve on this you could add a paragraph before the first line of speech when with Scott's help Chad limps into the HQ and complains that he hasn't been in this much pain after some of his most dangerous assignments. You could either do this or just change it so it doesn't have agents at all, and Jeff cross dresses becuase he likes to.
3) Yes you did, your variety of words was very good.
4) Yes there is a few things, "Sometimes HQ needs the person who goes in to be a woman and the person who does the actual work to be a man simply because a woman can get in, but if they turn into a man they'll never be suspected." This sentence somehow doesn't make very much sense, I think it is becuase there are so many things going on it. Maybe if you changed it to something along the lines of: Sometimes the job demands it, people generally trust women more than men. Also it is a good disguise, once he is inside he can turn can turn back into a man and the security won't know it is him." You also basically repeat everything you'd said in the next sentence. You could make this better by maybe just adding a small sentence that says: "Jeff is short and thin, so he is perfect for the job."
Anyway overall I did enjoy this, hopefully my comments did not come across as rude or that I was ripping your piece apart. Keep writing and improving! ^^
Thanks for your feedback, I really enjoy it when people give helpful comments like this. No I didn't think you were rude and your comments have helped me look at my story in a new light. I'm always happy when people try to help me improve.
You are very welcome, I'm pleased that my comments could help you and that you appreciated them. It's always nice to find writers that strive to improve their craft. ^^ If you ever need any more pieces critiquing, feel free to drop me a comment. I am always happy to help.