Comment on King of Thorns by vendixnosferatu
wow! action packed chapter! 
i love it all! you really have a knack for writing motion so well!
just one thing. in one or two of the paragraphs, its hard to follow what is happening and who is saying what. like the paragraph where alucard appears n front of integra to protect her. SHes commenting on integras expression? and the paragraph where i think sylfaen's knocked to the ground? she was knocked to the ground, right?
and that smacking his across the face with his own arm, too epic!
the bible quotes are, as usual, spot on~
oh! and that poor puppy!
very well done! i have to catch my breath!
i love it all! you really have a knack for writing motion so well!
just one thing. in one or two of the paragraphs, its hard to follow what is happening and who is saying what. like the paragraph where alucard appears n front of integra to protect her. SHes commenting on integras expression? and the paragraph where i think sylfaen's knocked to the ground? she was knocked to the ground, right?
and that smacking his across the face with his own arm, too epic!
the bible quotes are, as usual, spot on~
oh! and that poor puppy!
very well done! i have to catch my breath!
Thank you!! And sorry for confusing you. I intended for it to be directed at Alucard first, then to Integra.
She got knocked to the ground, yes. I'm so sorry for the confusion!
I had a dream of her smacking him in the face with his arm, so I just had to work it in.
Thank you so much!!!!!!
She got knocked to the ground, yes. I'm so sorry for the confusion!
I had a dream of her smacking him in the face with his arm, so I just had to work it in.
Thank you so much!!!!!!
its alright, i got it, just had to read it couple times over 
lol thats so cool, i wish i dreamed like you did
its no problem luv
lol thats so cool, i wish i dreamed like you did
its no problem luv
That's where most of my ideas come from, or at least a good 80%
Most of the time they're kinda weird though
Most of the time they're kinda weird though
lol if i dreamed like you do, things i could do... 
You do great things without having to dream!!! That in itself is sweeet!! 
I just had one where I'm Mario, and I was chasing a Goomba that stole my pasta. O_o
This is both a gift, and a really weird curse
I just had one where I'm Mario, and I was chasing a Goomba that stole my pasta. O_o
This is both a gift, and a really weird curse
lol ahahah thats wonderful in its own right