Comment on OMFG Boob Vore Part 3 by Donutwish
Heh ok, I'll put an 'End' at the bottom of the short story.
I think it needs more.
The milk flows again, and everyone lives happily ever after. Ok, maybe not everyone.
I think the process needs to be explained, like what does the girl feel?
This was a light-hearted and quick take on boob vore. If I was to write a more in-depth story, I would definitely go into more detail. As it is, I like to let the viewer's imagination fill in the blanks.
I guess.