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`darkcrescendo:icondarkcrescendo: Aug 14, 2003, 7:20:12 PM
Evil? I don't see it myself. Black humour perhaps. A less than stately ball for the recently, and not so recently departed... Although I feel the conversation at such an event would be dead...

I really did enjoy this poem. Apart from the line So this shrouded made his rapid way [which doesn't quite make sense, unless a word is missing] This is quite well written. I particularly am impressed with the way you have described the scene. I doubt prose could succeed any more successfully.

All in all an excellent piece.
Bravo!

Devious Comments

~iyikedralling:iconiyikedralling: Aug 14, 2003, 6:53:20 PM
Very nice....dark...I like...
~serenitykishona:iconserenitykishona: Aug 14, 2003, 7:00:34 PM
Muahaha.... evilness, darkness, black magic comes!!! ^^ Heheh... anything evil I like. Fav + myself!

Kitty
`darkcrescendo:icondarkcrescendo: Aug 14, 2003, 7:20:12 PM
Evil? I don't see it myself. Black humour perhaps. A less than stately ball for the recently, and not so recently departed... Although I feel the conversation at such an event would be dead...

I really did enjoy this poem. Apart from the line So this shrouded made his rapid way [which doesn't quite make sense, unless a word is missing] This is quite well written. I particularly am impressed with the way you have described the scene. I doubt prose could succeed any more successfully.

All in all an excellent piece.
Bravo!
~danceman:icondanceman: Aug 14, 2003, 7:43:27 PM
this is... awesome. i love the gothic feeling. very very good friend :nod:
hope you write more of these, really enjoyed reading it.
~falconfemme:iconfalconfemme: Aug 14, 2003, 8:04:29 PM
Wow that first stanza is truly awesome as is the rest, Great work once again!:floating:
*asuka-lilith:iconasuka-lilith: Aug 14, 2003, 8:19:08 PM
ahh i love it it soo mazing *thumbs up to you* u love this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~ehlane:iconehlane: Aug 14, 2003, 11:10:47 PM
I adore your romatic poems...but this is...this is...simply sublime. What a night for the dancing dead! :clap: and :+fav:
~lost-but-found:iconlost-but-found: Aug 15, 2003, 2:01:04 AM
o ma gawd da the imagery! and the rhymin! fwuffy! go fwuffy go! :w00t:
~horrificlivers:iconhorrificlivers: Aug 15, 2003, 7:55:41 AM
this is brill, reminded me of a lot of 18th century gothic stuff like Lewis and Shelley, especially from Frankenstein i think its something like :
The man who walks oft in fear and dread
Knowing close behind him a fearful thing doth tread...
I got a real sense of a haunted faintly burlesque poem like something satirised by the likes of Anne Ratcliffe. you are definately dwelling in a romantic gothic realm! apart from anything else your rhyming scheme is superlative and you have a real knack for creating suspense. this is engrossing.
~okami-no-oni:iconokami-no-oni: Aug 15, 2003, 9:28:35 AM
I would have to agree completely with :devdarkscrescendo:, especially in the way I doubt that this piece could be surpassed in prose. You wrote this in a truly amazing fashion! Great work!