Well...more-or-less everything.
Didn't identify with the characters, felt the universe was far too grimdark for ponies, the writing style seemed to drag with too much description pasted on everything, Little Pip has all the attraction of wallpaper paste on cardboard, it didn't capture the sadness of civilisation ending like Fallout itself did, the sub-plot with the mane six's terminals felt kinda tagged on rather than well integrated into the fic itself.