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~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Mar 3, 2006, 4:48:31 PM
huzzah. i've grown fond of this symmetrical device, this colon.

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Devious Comments

~merrydishnig:iconmerrydishnig: Jan 29, 2006, 9:34:02 PM
this contains such lovely detail for something so short and is chock-full of possibility. this could be anything. I love the word obsidian. It is a word fit to capture the magnificent imagery of this piece with it's rustic yet smooth nobility.
~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Jan 30, 2006, 4:40:40 PM
it simply rolls off your tongue.

thanks.

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*abecedary:iconabecedary: Feb 5, 2006, 8:52:05 PM
"where trees grew men
obsidian tissues
disarmed their screams
and dead sneezes
whir in winded rain."

^ Winded rain didn't cross over very smoothly for me in that I kept reading wounded rain. i need the lenses.

In short, I took this as almost an homage for that which is long gone and never to return; the dead, in fact, don't speak, or what have you. Choose the cliché.
I cherish "and dead sneezes."

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~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Feb 5, 2006, 8:55:49 PM
thanks.

contacts could make your eye balls explode.

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!xxxxxx:iconxxxxxx: Feb 8, 2006, 11:57:01 AM
very nice. i am particularly fond of the first line, it sets a minimal yet sucking ambient right off, and at the same time evokes something "other than". good stuff.

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~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Feb 8, 2006, 1:31:11 PM
thanks love.

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~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Feb 8, 2006, 2:33:45 PM
now that i have spent many days thinking it over, i am debating the concept. wounded does have its appeals.

or perhaps whir wounded in rain

i have much to think about. thanks bunches again.

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*abecedary:iconabecedary: Feb 8, 2006, 2:55:18 PM
Whir wounded, I think, sounds better. The rhythm is too sweet to pass up.

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~Ellephive:iconEllephive: Feb 8, 2006, 3:07:58 PM
:orange: love for the suggestion.

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