Comment on Pony POV Series Side Story 'Cruel's Best Pet by alexwarlorn

Okay, first off: this will be a general comment to a lot of the chapters you have done so far.

1. In regard of this chapter with Fluttercruel/Shy and the alternate outlook on the episode, I am going to say that this was as far as it goes enjoyable. Not necessarily what I looked for in the greater schemes of your writing (in the end I prefer your story that add something to the cosmology of your little POV universe and give more insights into background characters and such) and to be quiet honest, I am not that found on utting entire song lyrics in a fiction (especially when they are of one of the longer songs in the show) but overall it helped. Seeing Fluttercruel react to some things (like Fluttershy being overwhelmed by the possibility to give Dash a pet) the obvious "Dash always dresses in style" joke and the bits of Fluttercruel and Dash bounding (but still making it realistically clear, that they have their differences and a long way to go if true trust has to be established) were good. Overall, I would give that chapter two points out of five if you get the drift.

2. Your big amount of chapter output over the last few weeks, regarding all the sidecharacters/main characters of the show:
I really, really liked that. Especially the parts with Pinkie and Applejack. Knowing your attemtps of putting your fanfic as close to the show cannon as possible, it was quite good that with those chapters you showed (at least I ope I interpreted it right) the following: That you want to make it as close as possible, but you will sooner or later not rewrite everything, cause in some way it is better to "differ" also from the source material, when it keeps the flow of the story working. And seeing how after all you still have a huge respect for the show, making clear that in the end your story is not supposed to be cannon but rather something like an "alternate universe story"/just a fanfic, it really works. So yeah, whatever comes in the future, whatever "references" of the show and episodes you want to put in here, I hope you will be able to make them work with your own story ideas, without jeopardizing cannon/your story in the big scheme.

In regard of the other characters, I especially liked the chapters with Lickety (nice references there to the old stuff) , Pip (because it gave indirectly also character development to Luna) and Silver Spoon. The last one was especially great because of the shout outs to two of the CMCs and their coonectionto G3/3.5, but also because I really enjoy the kind of development you try to give Silver Spoon. You know, showing that there is more to her than just a "jerk" who hangs out with the fellow rich kid at school.

So I hope to hear from you something in the future. Oh and I am really curious if you would ever put up elements from "Hearts and Hooves Day" in your story. Cause that would be awesome, at least when it comes to Discord and the "love poison".