Comment on you're a series of unconnected thoughts by paperheartsyndrome
I really like how you worked with your verbs here, using them in an intransitive manner, at times forcing it, and thus creating some kind of emptiness, hollowness (eg. repeat: usually it should be "repeat itself" or at least "repeat something"). I would have very much liked to see whether this could be done more consequently, but it's still great the way you did it.
I love how this comment makes me feel like I actually am trying to do wonderful things when really, I'm probably just being grammatically incorrect. I'll take it though -- totally meant to do this. (:
Honestly, I have little foresight into anything I do, but I do love the idea of having carried it through a bit more. Maybe I'll rework and actually just my head a bit more. Thank you.
Honestly, I have little foresight into anything I do, but I do love the idea of having carried it through a bit more. Maybe I'll rework and actually just my head a bit more. Thank you.
Sometimes it's just intuition. Personally, thinking too much about a concept ends with me really disliking its outcome. Creating such moments I described "accidentally" only shows that one had a rather authentic feel for the piece. So, that's even better than planning it all cool-mindedly. 