Comment on Jillisa Mermaid Transformation Story by edwin7
wow
i really like it, it's a good sense of imagination to even be able to write like that
just one thing for constructive criticism:
make seperate paragraphs! When i looked at it whooooa like a hyptnotize thing!
i really like it, it's a good sense of imagination to even be able to write like that
just one thing for constructive criticism:
make seperate paragraphs! When i looked at it whooooa like a hyptnotize thing!