Comment on Inhuman Resources: Chapter 2 by DamonWakes
I'm not sure how I missed the chapter. Doesn't matter- I found it. 
I just want to say how much I loved this line: Payment details will be decided pending re-establishment of a national government. It gives us a lot of history; plus it made me laugh. You've got a really good grip on technical writing (like writing fliers, lingo for advanced computers, guns, robots) and creative writing alike.
I also want to compliment you on your ability to reveal history without doing a history dump. You cleverly intertwine characters comments, old newspaper clippings, evacuation food, etc, to give us a scene of where we are. You've mastered the "show don't tell" technique.
I'm really curious to find out what happened to Dobe.
This story has an underlying feel of tension, but it's just the right amount. You interject dry humor in the story too, which I love. The dog food, the bit about people having "gold laying around" all that stuff is great.
I'm falling in love with your writing. I can't wait to read more.
I just want to say how much I loved this line: Payment details will be decided pending re-establishment of a national government. It gives us a lot of history; plus it made me laugh. You've got a really good grip on technical writing (like writing fliers, lingo for advanced computers, guns, robots) and creative writing alike.
I also want to compliment you on your ability to reveal history without doing a history dump. You cleverly intertwine characters comments, old newspaper clippings, evacuation food, etc, to give us a scene of where we are. You've mastered the "show don't tell" technique.
I'm really curious to find out what happened to Dobe.
This story has an underlying feel of tension, but it's just the right amount. You interject dry humor in the story too, which I love. The dog food, the bit about people having "gold laying around" all that stuff is great.
I'm falling in love with your writing.
I can't wait to read more.
Assuming you ended up reading Three before this, I'm glad it didn't spoil it for you. 
And thank you so much. I'm afraid I've had a lot of experience reading that sort of thing, so it comes fairly easily. Certain sorts of people/companies never seem to want to say things in plain English, and I suspect it's because what they're saying would sound dodgy if they did.
I can't stand info/history dumps when I'm reading. There's something nice about piecing together a setting, but reading an entire paragraph of history (even if it's really just a summary) feels like homework to me.
And thank you so much.
I'm afraid I've had a lot of experience reading that sort of thing, so it comes fairly easily. Certain sorts of people/companies never seem to want to say things in plain English, and I suspect it's because what they're saying would sound dodgy if they did.I can't stand info/history dumps when I'm reading. There's something nice about piecing together a setting, but reading an entire paragraph of history (even if it's really just a summary) feels like homework to me.