Comment on Loyalty and Will part 6 by xgamerx01
Did I say I didn't like it? No, I believe I asked if it was necessary. To me, all fourth wall breaking ends up with me facepalming.
As for the rest of it, it was ok. I’m glad you made it a point to point out Dash’s lack of fighting skills because Equestria is so peaceful.
Oh, and in future chapters I would recommend reading it after your done typing it to make sure you don’t make too many mistakes. I found a few errors here and there.
As for the rest of it, it was ok. I’m glad you made it a point to point out Dash’s lack of fighting skills because Equestria is so peaceful.
Oh, and in future chapters I would recommend reading it after your done typing it to make sure you don’t make too many mistakes. I found a few errors here and there.
You didn't say it but i could tell...no it wasn't necessary but like i said, it was a "what the hell" moment.
I'm think of submitting it to a discord group, just this one chapter.
Thank you
I spent 6 hours in a row on this...i went through three different look-overs editing it everytime, idk what else to do
I'm think of submitting it to a discord group, just this one chapter.
Thank you
I spent 6 hours in a row on this...i went through three different look-overs editing it everytime, idk what else to do
Ah, whatever. I guess we all have to break the fourth wall at some point in time or another.
I could show you some of the mistakes I found if you think that'll help.
I could show you some of the mistakes I found if you think that'll help.
it was just a one time thing
that could help
that could help
Well here's what I found:
"There, the protector gauds it..." I think you meant to say guards it.
"But not long anof" Enough would be preferred there
"Hey you got your interdiction no shut up and get ready to fight in the next chapter…" I think Discord wants an introduction, not an interdiction. And now instead of no.
And you forgot to capatalize Tails twice during Knuckles part and Sonic once when Dash was thinking.
"There, the protector gauds it..." I think you meant to say guards it.
"But not long anof" Enough would be preferred there
"Hey you got your interdiction no shut up and get ready to fight in the next chapter…" I think Discord wants an introduction, not an interdiction. And now instead of no.
And you forgot to capatalize Tails twice during Knuckles part and Sonic once when Dash was thinking.
thanks
FUCK YOU SPELLING CHECK, YOU GAVE ME THE WRONG ONE
ok for a while i kept thinking what was the word for it, because i'm absent minded and i tend to forget the simplest things
i questioned the spelling check several times but the spelling check kept leading me back to that word
well i'm off to make the changes
FUCK YOU SPELLING CHECK, YOU GAVE ME THE WRONG ONE
ok for a while i kept thinking what was the word for it, because i'm absent minded and i tend to forget the simplest things
i questioned the spelling check several times but the spelling check kept leading me back to that word
well i'm off to make the changes
Geez, spell check is a troll for you isn’t it.
I know the feeling. For a good long while, while typing my fan fictions I would use ya instead of yeah and didn't think that was wrong for some reason.
I know the feeling. For a good long while, while typing my fan fictions I would use ya instead of yeah and didn't think that was wrong for some reason.
i hate trolls...SOOOOOOOOO much
i now the spelling check is a troll i don't want to live on this planet anymore
i now the spelling check is a troll i don't want to live on this planet anymore
Yo I did 4th wall breaking too in my story