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Comment on Roefinn School - Part 1 by =ebony66136

:iconthriss:
~Thriss Apr 30, 2006, 7:23:46 PM
Y'know, there are times when I read something and I get a little bored and I start skimming and skipping sentences...I just can't do that with your stuff. I keep finding sentences that, as soon as I might get into skipping mode, are too well-written to ignore, and I get roped back in. I need to learn how to do that...

Never leave again, okay? :D

Okay, real comments: I know nothing about English schools (except what I've read from Harry Potter, and that clarify's nothing). I know in America you have elementary school (grades Kindergarten, 1st-5th or 6th, depending on where you are, equaling ages 6-11 or 12), middle school or junior high (middle school can be 6th or 7th grade to 8th grade, ages 12 or 13 to 14; junior high is 7th to 8th or 9th grade, ages 13 to 14 or 15), then high school (9th grade (freshman) or 10th grade (sophomore) to 12th grade (senior), ages 15 or 16 to 18). Then you go to college and forget you were ever young, for your own sanity's sake. So yeah, I have no idea what GCSEs are or A-levels or anything else like that. Ignorance doesn't take away from the story, though, so yay! :D

Mommy's a bitch, isn't she? (As if the shirt didn't give it away :D). Love this line: "I know it’s wrong to call your mum a bitch but with mine it’s more of a scientific observation." Definately gets the point across, and gives me very solid clue into your narrator's sardonic nature.

Um...trying to find something wrong...looking...nope! Nothin's showin' up.

With that said: YAY! Pikeman's may be done, but I've got another series to look forward to!!!

--
Give and ye shall recieve. :handshake:

"If you ever find yourself in an epic war of good versus evil, remember to bring along plenty of extra shirts." ~ from The Deathbringer

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:iconthriss:
~Thriss Apr 30, 2006, 7:23:46 PM
Y'know, there are times when I read something and I get a little bored and I start skimming and skipping sentences...I just can't do that with your stuff. I keep finding sentences that, as soon as I might get into skipping mode, are too well-written to ignore, and I get roped back in. I need to learn how to do that...

Never leave again, okay? :D

Okay, real comments: I know nothing about English schools (except what I've read from Harry Potter, and that clarify's nothing). I know in America you have elementary school (grades Kindergarten, 1st-5th or 6th, depending on where you are, equaling ages 6-11 or 12), middle school or junior high (middle school can be 6th or 7th grade to 8th grade, ages 12 or 13 to 14; junior high is 7th to 8th or 9th grade, ages 13 to 14 or 15), then high school (9th grade (freshman) or 10th grade (sophomore) to 12th grade (senior), ages 15 or 16 to 18). Then you go to college and forget you were ever young, for your own sanity's sake. So yeah, I have no idea what GCSEs are or A-levels or anything else like that. Ignorance doesn't take away from the story, though, so yay! :D

Mommy's a bitch, isn't she? (As if the shirt didn't give it away :D). Love this line: "I know it’s wrong to call your mum a bitch but with mine it’s more of a scientific observation." Definately gets the point across, and gives me very solid clue into your narrator's sardonic nature.

Um...trying to find something wrong...looking...nope! Nothin's showin' up.

With that said: YAY! Pikeman's may be done, but I've got another series to look forward to!!!

--
Give and ye shall recieve. :handshake:

"If you ever find yourself in an epic war of good versus evil, remember to bring along plenty of extra shirts." ~ from The Deathbringer
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~WonderingVagabond May 1, 2006, 12:07:32 AM
I really dig your descriptions. I'm particularly a fan of the Gardens. I really would like to know the story of that grave myself. This is really intriguing, I can't wait to read the next bit!

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"My gift of self is raped. My privacy is raked. And yet I find...and yet I find repeating in my head. If I can't be my own...I'd feel better dead."--"Nutshell", Alice In Chains
:iconebony66136:
=ebony66136 May 1, 2006, 12:26:43 AM
:phew: I'm glad you could understand it and thanks for your kind words. :blowkiss:

GCSEs are exams you do at 16 and they're compulsory (you can leave school after doing them). A-Levels are exams you do at 18 and they're not compulsory (you do them to get into university).
I always thought the freshman sophomore stuff refered to university (your college). You learn something every day. :D

--
"Why do I have six screens? Because I don't have room for eight." - Terry Pratchett

It is a certifiable fact that everything good in life is either illegal, amoral or fattening.
:iconebony66136:
=ebony66136 May 1, 2006, 12:34:09 AM
The next bit shouldn't take too long because most of it has already been done.
Glad you like the Gardens and thanks for reading. :hug:

--
"Why do I have six screens? Because I don't have room for eight." - Terry Pratchett

It is a certifiable fact that everything good in life is either illegal, amoral or fattening.
:iconwonderingvagabond:
~WonderingVagabond May 1, 2006, 12:47:34 AM
You write good stuff, how could I not read? :)

--
"My gift of self is raped. My privacy is raked. And yet I find...and yet I find repeating in my head. If I can't be my own...I'd feel better dead."--"Nutshell", Alice In Chains
:iconthriss:
~Thriss May 1, 2006, 6:57:59 AM
The freshman etc titles are applied to both university and high school settings. Dunno why, though.

--
Give and ye shall recieve. :handshake:

"If you ever find yourself in an epic war of good versus evil, remember to bring along plenty of extra shirts." ~ from The Deathbringer
:icondorianngayan:
~DorianNGayan May 3, 2006, 2:11:48 PM
Anyway, I’m not sure there’s a lock-pick in the world that could get you out of Roefinn.

Just one of the dozens of sentences that make this amazing. I've read a lot of work by Brits and I'm going to say something that won't mean a lot to you, but it means a ton to me.

Your work makes me not mind the extraneous 'u's.

There. I said it. The angels of Hell are screaming, and snowflakes are falling in August.

Great work. I want more. Now!

--
"You were wrong Uncle Dorian."

"Progress on project World Domination will continue on Friday when someone brings in a drill." - *ebony66136
:iconebony66136:
=ebony66136 May 4, 2006, 12:51:04 AM
Thank you. :hug: I have a vague idea what you mean by the "extraneous 'u's" comment and I'm really, really honoured.
I promise I will keep writing. :)

--
"Why do I have six screens? Because I don't have room for eight." - Terry Pratchett

It is a certifiable fact that everything good in life is either illegal, amoral or fattening.
:iconebony66136:
=ebony66136 May 4, 2006, 12:52:27 AM
I just reread that comment. I swear that wasn't meant to be a joke! :laughing:

--
"Why do I have six screens? Because I don't have room for eight." - Terry Pratchett

It is a certifiable fact that everything good in life is either illegal, amoral or fattening.
:icondorianngayan:
~DorianNGayan May 4, 2006, 11:54:57 AM
dont worry, like I said, you make me not mind

--
"You were wrong Uncle Dorian."

"Progress on project World Domination will continue on Friday when someone brings in a drill." - *ebony66136
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