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~AusDrac:iconAusDrac: May 4, 2006, 7:29:59 AM
Wow. Not much more I can add to what's already been said about this poem.

I really think folks all over should read it and understand what greed can and is doing to us all. What a powerful image you portray and so well worded and rhymed. Easy on the eye to read, easy on the ear to listen to (perhaps even when sung ? :) ).

:thumbsup: :D
:+fav: - Congratulations m'lady. You done great :salute:

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~Skinhead-Budda:iconSkinhead-Budda: May 4, 2006, 6:21:46 AM
My god thats amazing. Set out beautifully, it rhymes so easily, and you use of language is fantastic!

"Greed's a deadly sin, you see,
in truth, the root of all-
pride is greed for virtue,
and goes before a fall"

-absolutely brilliant!

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Truth is the Best Human Quality-DIAMOND IN THE ROUGH
=SorrowBurn:iconSorrowBurn: May 4, 2006, 7:08:59 AM
Y'know jen, thats the perfect "Trad" poem, flow rhyme structure is all perfect. Great job!

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Wit + Irony X Sarcasm2 - Cynicism + Charm =SorrowBurn

You can agree with me, or be wrong.

"Despair is a comfort, desire a regret."
V. Laihila. 04.
~LJRphotography:iconLJRphotography: May 4, 2006, 7:16:26 AM
That is amazing. Im so glad you put some poetry up after all those cool looking images :giggle: Now my eyes have reset to normal hehe

:hug: I love this poem

So very well organised and the structure is great.
~AusDrac:iconAusDrac: May 4, 2006, 7:29:59 AM
Wow. Not much more I can add to what's already been said about this poem.

I really think folks all over should read it and understand what greed can and is doing to us all. What a powerful image you portray and so well worded and rhymed. Easy on the eye to read, easy on the ear to listen to (perhaps even when sung ? :) ).

:thumbsup: :D
:+fav: - Congratulations m'lady. You done great :salute:

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Member of *macrophoto, ~Photocritique, *PhotographyChannel and ~ExiledPoetry.
`switchbladeserenade:iconswitchbladeserenade: May 4, 2006, 7:44:54 AM
I love the simple rhyme structure, you can almost chant this. It contrasts well with the complex subject.

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I'm Like A Needle To The Vein

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*Spamuel:iconSpamuel: May 4, 2006, 12:46:16 PM
powerful stuff -- a strong, simple rhyme scheme too. melikes.

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The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on; nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears blot out a Word of it.
`Rushy:iconRushy: May 4, 2006, 12:49:23 PM
well I'm going straight to hell.....

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In vino veritas, nunc est bibendum. - In wine is truth, now we must drink.
~raddie:iconraddie: May 4, 2006, 1:06:23 PM
Amazing job.
I love the first stanza, and the last stanze summarises the poem quite well!

I love the flow of the poem, and how its message is so..simple.
Incredible, as always.

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~FirstDayOfMyLife:iconFirstDayOfMyLife: May 4, 2006, 1:26:12 PM
I like this a lot :) Yeah it's a shame about the contest. I was so proud of mine :(

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You acted the film star while you were still spoken for, it didn't look rosy for me.
=nevergetfooledagain:iconnevergetfooledagain: May 4, 2006, 1:48:27 PM
And I'm going to be right behind you. I'm guilty of at least four of those--five, if you count greed itself. :giggle: I'll leave it to you to guess which ones, though. :eyes: :smooch:

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"Living is easy with eyes closed, misunderstanding all you see..."
The Beatles, "Strawberry Fields"