Hopefully you won't mind my critique. Hopefully I don't come off as harsh, it's just a humble opinion. I'd like to learn and expand my own writing so most of it will be in the form of questions.
First, I'm curious about the rhyme scheme. I'm not sure if the breaks in the rhyming are there deliberately and I couldn't figure out why. Like in "finger" then "world" and further down "get" and "condolences". It'd be great to understand the reasoning or depth behind that.
You also change the pronoun from the 3rd stanza onward. It switches from first person and then from the 15th and 16th stanza, you switch back to I. Is it a progression from "I" to "you" to "they" to "we"? Namely the expansion and involvement of yourself in the accusation?
Furthermore, the form or object of "you" seems to change. "Watch you band together and witness you antagonize another" in contrast to "they are too afraid of being brought down by you". The "you" early on seems to be the antagonist, cowardly and negative whereas the "you" later on is courageous and seems to be a protagonist. Is it a deliberate change? Is there meant to be a divide? Or is it a generic reference to a collective? Or is it a change in perspective? I'm a little confused there.
Perhaps it's a matter of style but it could be cleaner and more concise, fewer words and articles. For example "wrapped inside of society's shadows", you could drop the "of" because it doesn't serve much purpose.
Finally, there seems to be this overwhelming trend (especially on DA) to not use punctuation when writing poetry. And I really don't know why. Am I missing something?
As far as content goes, there is a degree of melodrama but it is controlled as well, which I like
I feel there are too many histrionic, exaggerated pieces on DA. The content can be a little vague, perhaps deliberately so, which is both a good thing and bad thing.
I'd be really interested to see the reasoning behind it
Can't wait for your reply