Comment on Falling by CynicalPsychic
Interesting! I like it. Though it feels a little "jumpy" in places. Maybe add some more details?
I left it ambiguous intentionally, but where do you think I should add a little more specifically?
Sorry, didn't mean it that way. I mean there are lots of places with tons of detail, whereas there are places with fewer detail. For example, the speaker spends a lot more time talking about the pain of falling and imminent death, but relatively little on the device and the surroundings.
I see what you mean. I could probably do more on the surroundings, but not on the device because I want the beginning to be as up to interpretation as possible 
(and I don't know what to do without sounding like I'm copying Portal 2)
(and I don't know what to do without sounding like I'm copying Portal 2)