Comment on Time turning... by oliviaotakusama101
time as a way of passing, yet for the one who turns back time, where would you go?
as the choice can be infinite, as we know where we went wrong, will we change our path?
and will we make a different mistake, and will we go back an change that?
as we look at the twilight we wander, as we ponder for what we have done.
we go back to where we started, maybe it might not be right, but we want to try and make a change.
still we want to try, as we are mortal and mortals have the mortality of wanting the right the wrong
even if it is good or bad.
Craig Allen
as the choice can be infinite, as we know where we went wrong, will we change our path?
and will we make a different mistake, and will we go back an change that?
as we look at the twilight we wander, as we ponder for what we have done.
we go back to where we started, maybe it might not be right, but we want to try and make a change.
still we want to try, as we are mortal and mortals have the mortality of wanting the right the wrong
even if it is good or bad.
Craig Allen
Haha for a moment, I thought you wrote that, seeing as how you already write great poetry yourself. But yes, time is a thing to ponder, I use to waste my time playing video games for hours on end.
I found no time for doing the things that I loved the most like drawing and writing. Everyone wants to change their path, but if they hadn't taken that path in the first place, they would have never known.
Ahhh, I'm blubbering about literature again... *shakes head* Thanks again for commenting and favoriting darling!
I only wish my pieces were more like yours, more creative, and not as simple.
I found no time for doing the things that I loved the most like drawing and writing. Everyone wants to change their path, but if they hadn't taken that path in the first place, they would have never known.
Ahhh, I'm blubbering about literature again... *shakes head* Thanks again for commenting and favoriting darling!
I only wish my pieces were more like yours, more creative, and not as simple.
i did write it so true with wanting do what we all love. no i want you to blubber about literature, please continue
KYAHHH!! You did??!! That was wonderful! I thought you were quoting a professional poet! (I really did, you know that) Ohhh so your name is Craig... *face palm*
Really? Continue? Deary dear, if I continue I do not and can not stop. Especially my critques on pieces, usually 500 words more or less! *sweat drop*
Did you publish this poem in DA yet? If not or dont want to, all I want to say is it nice! *over dramatic about poems...* ^.^
But if you wish for me to continue... I enjoy poetry with a great vision, filled with creativity and techniques that are just so clever, they leave that... that smart smirk if you know what I'm talking about. I like yours because of the vision of that twilight and the connectice word of ponder. I know that it means to think, but relating the word to the closest rhyme, I think and see a pond, under the twilight.
Theres more, but if I go on, it might as well be a review/crituque. Sum it up, I love poetry and stories... ahhh... (^_^)
Really? Continue? Deary dear, if I continue I do not and can not stop. Especially my critques on pieces, usually 500 words more or less! *sweat drop*
Did you publish this poem in DA yet? If not or dont want to, all I want to say is it nice! *over dramatic about poems...* ^.^
But if you wish for me to continue... I enjoy poetry with a great vision, filled with creativity and techniques that are just so clever, they leave that... that smart smirk if you know what I'm talking about. I like yours because of the vision of that twilight and the connectice word of ponder. I know that it means to think, but relating the word to the closest rhyme, I think and see a pond, under the twilight.
Theres more, but if I go on, it might as well be a review/crituque. Sum it up, I love poetry and stories... ahhh... (^_^)
Yes more! i enjoy your thoughts, it is nice to hear how much Poetry effects you.
i sounds odd, but i have this hesitant feeling when i comes to publishing my poetry. I want to, but i fear they will be a flop.
I am happy you like what i wrote
i sounds odd, but i have this hesitant feeling when i comes to publishing my poetry. I want to, but i fear they will be a flop.
I am happy you like what i wrote
Ahhh its almost shameful how much poetry effects me, sometimes I feel like an old man ranting about a really good book that my voice becomes boring after a while. I dunno, to be, poetry is a form of art, but even if a picture is worth a thousand words, there are just some words that can not be drawn on paper.
I like what you wrote. Of course, but what do you mean my "flop"?
I like what you wrote. Of course, but what do you mean my "flop"?
now i know i would enjoy listening and contemplating on every you talk about. I know i would enjoy listening and of course it would inspire me to keep writing. so true even in picture words said aloud or even to oneself draw the emotion from what you say in mind or to another.
flop? i feel that if i do publish it wouldn't be as other poets of written, i would feel like a joke rather than a poet. I do love the idea, i guess its me.
flop? i feel that if i do publish it wouldn't be as other poets of written, i would feel like a joke rather than a poet. I do love the idea, i guess its me.
You enjoy listening to my radical nonsense?? XDD Everytime I compliment someones poetry, they always seem content afterwords, its because I only comment when I truely like it.
And when I do, the compliments just can't stop from escaping from my mouth. I'm always honest in being critical about literature works, I dunno... I'm such a weird child...
Don't be like that, your poems are nice, as I said, I mistaken it for a professional's (you know, like the poems you would analyse in school written my profs) If you're not content with it, just know that I like it, and others too. Better than my post card sized text...
Yeah, keep writing, and once you reached a good place to stand, don't look back.
P.S See a doctor to check out your ears if you like it when I rant so much. XD
And when I do, the compliments just can't stop from escaping from my mouth. I'm always honest in being critical about literature works, I dunno... I'm such a weird child...
Don't be like that, your poems are nice, as I said, I mistaken it for a professional's (you know, like the poems you would analyse in school written my profs) If you're not content with it, just know that I like it, and others too. Better than my post card sized text...
Yeah, keep writing, and once you reached a good place to stand, don't look back.
P.S See a doctor to check out your ears if you like it when I rant so much. XD
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