Comment on Why'd you bring me him? by Bread-Crumbz
One thing. You keep switching back and forth between past and present tense.
Needless to say, it's distracting.
Needless to say, it's distracting.
I knoowwww D: im sorry about that! I do it to sort of progress forward only because it will help them reunite quicker and I feel like it going day by day will drag it on. I know this was a big leap..but it will definitely slow down now :>
I think you're confused. I don't mean story-wise. I mean TENSE. Past and Present tense, LOOK IT UP! Switching back and forth between past and present tense is NOT OKAY. It's distracting.
okay well I'll keep an eye on that, thank you!