Comment on YGO fic --Chapter 1 by *hibbary

Aww, that was a cute story :3
I think you write really well. Much better than most people who write/have wrote a fanfic! Most fanfics I've read are so crummy D:
This one had great grammar.

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Call me Daikei

*Walks up the wall and sits on the ceiling*

Wonderful writing! I do hope you write more! Will it be slash or a straight pairing?
I like how Mokuba Isn't the defenseless brother that other authors often portray.

Yay! I'm the first to review!

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I don't know if the world is run by smart people who are putting us on, or imbeciles who really mean it.

It's slash. That was the dare. But it's fairly tasteful slash. I hate soulless, fuck-festing Yaoi.

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Congraturation.
This story is happy end. Thank you. Being the wise and courageour knight that you are
you feel strongth welling. In your body. Return to starting point. Challenge again!

XD I'm a whore for grammar. I'm shakey on some of the more obscure rules, but for the most part, I try to practice good grammar.

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Congraturation.
This story is happy end. Thank you. Being the wise and courageour knight that you are
you feel strongth welling. In your body. Return to starting point. Challenge again!

Aw, that was so sweet and well-written! You wrote for them so well, with such great characterization.

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"There's a difference between having artist interests and being psychotic."

<3

It's always good to have good grammer. It bugs the heck out of me when people don't know how to spell. XD

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Call me Daikei

*Walks up the wall and sits on the ceiling*

What a wonderful story. <3

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Just when I thought I had seen everything, Ash goes and turns into a Pikachu.

"Y-Yes! I'm all about capicing! Capice'd loud and clear!"

"Drift gotten! I-I'm all over that drift, sir!"

ONG! Awesome writin' mate :} Hope you put up the rest of it ^^

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^{Creak, creak, tower of purgatory
Piercing the world like light
Sway, sway, tower of spine
Will it be us or the sky that falls?}

Wow, I sure as hell didn't expect this to appear uploaded!

Man, people get so bent out of shape about writing and grammar and technique; it's silly. I feel bad for your friend that had a bad experience uploading some writing. I mean, writing is a creative process, right? They're called the 'Literary Arts,' right?

I wonder how it got this stigma attached to it. Maybe writing has this quality that makes it seem more accessible than other artistic areas. I mean, a striking majority of people have at least some training in the language their culture uses, and you need to use language in order to function within that culture. So, maybe there's this idea where anybody can write, so it's just writing.

Pictures, on the other hand, music, what have you, are a little more arcane; they've got this mysterious, alluring, "have it or you don't" sort of mysticism attached. So, maybe dabbling in the literary arts garners you less credit than not. I mean, everyone's down on fan fiction, right? As far as I'm aware, it's more or less just the butt of jokes. Fanart, on the other hand, is perfectly fine. A lot of people like it.

I dunno. I'm just wondering aloud about what causes writing to make you a worse person. Whatever it is, it's retarded. People should express themselves anyway they want, unless it's in a dangerous or stupid manner. So bravo to your fanfiction! I have read some staggeringly bad fiction in my day, and your writing doesn't give me dry heaves or anything, so keep right on truckin'.

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Bella es, nōvimus, et puella, vērum est,
et dīves - quis enim potest negāre?
Sed cum tē nimium, Fabulla, laudās,
nec dīves neque bella nec puella es!
-Martial

Oh yeah. And when people say something like "wow your so kewl!!!!!111" >_< I can't stand it when people say "your" instead of "you're".
It's like...My WHAT is cool?

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_{Freakazoid: Hey, Cosgrove? How come you never got married?
Cosgrove: Because I like meat too much.
Freakazoid: You could get married and still eat a lot of meat! :D
Cosgrove: ...I didn't know that.}