Comment on Becoming by Bark

alapip's avatar
a well articulated cleansing, Ron,
[though the second line may be a
bit over the top]. ;)

know that you're not alone in having
injustice in the past. there are a lot
of us. personally, i had a period of
eleven years of good fortune in my
30s, and thus focusing on that, the
present is quite livable.

the future is that-away-->

:)pip
LancelotPrice's avatar
Not even close to over the top. :)
LancelotPrice's avatar
Meaning it's under the top and entirely true. I see this stuff every day.
alapip's avatar
i dunno. it just read as one long word too many,
but i still faved it. :nod:
LancelotPrice's avatar
Ah, so your objection was poetic. I see. :)
alapip's avatar
both that and the third
multi-syllabic word in
a row seemed screed-y.
LancelotPrice's avatar
But you coulda had pretty much the same sonic effect by>

Where the two-faced
doublespeaking
backstabbers

Maybe with even slightly more 'punch'.
alapip's avatar
whatever Ron prefers, actually...

[you trapped me into bothering again]:hmm:
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Bark's avatar
Yeah, this came up after talking to my sister on the phone yesterday. I've managed to put it behind me for the most part. I love the city and it's people where I am now.
alapip's avatar
yeah, i suppose it's past time to
phone my sister too.

being retired now, i may return to
Nashua NH, where the good years i
mentioned were lived... but i may
not bother to visit again where
home didn't feel like home.

:shrug:pip