You did very well on your human interpretations. They're almost exactly how I envisioned them.
So will you control only one pony... er, person, throughout the story, or will you alternate between the characters? Since it's a visual novel, I assume there's romance involved, or at least is an option. My only wonder is, does it all revolve around this "Tom" character, or the Mane Six, or any of the above?
Well, I'll look forward to the release and see how it goes, myself. Bra-vo on this piece, BTW.