Comment on Do You Understand? by Yellow-Eyed-Demons

This is certainly a neat idea, but it's a shame you didn't come up with it. It's not like you can't use the metaphor, many metaphors have been used time and time again they've become a natural part of our daily conversations, but when you add nothing new to the table the entire story rings false. There's no emotional pull, this poem feels fake and manufactured. Adapting others ideals is wonderful, but you need to find your own voice to speak up in.
Also, more of a side note that bugs me about DA in general, "(c) original owner" is not proper credit and is stealing and people need to stop being lazy about crediting. By no means am I meaning to attack you in saying that, I just wish people would bother to try and do some research instead of being so vague about credits, which would get them in trouble in the real world.