So I really liked the idea behind this and thought I'd have a shoot at a little redesign with keeping to the original concept.
I did 2 versions, both pretty similar;
Version 1:
imgur.com/dvIFEh4Version 2:
imgur.com/W320TmKI don't know what's going on with the different fonts on different letters, but it didn't look that bad so I didn't mess around trying to fix it.