Comment on Things I Would Tell Her by Nichrysalis
Sad, but well-written. I am a bit confused about the last line, though. What does it mean?
Hmm, maybe the last line could be made clearer? Not sure how yet, but this is what the last line is talking about:
The last line of the poem is significant because of its use of two phrases. There's a common phrase men say that goes "not all men are..." and came about as a response to the feminist movement (though very recently). Earlier this year there was a shooting spree where a Men's Rights Activist killed and injured several people, and his reasoning for doing so was that women didn't pay attention to him and wouldn't have sex with him, among other sexist beliefs. This prompted an entire response to his words and actions from women and men alike, and a phrase emerged used by women who argued with men saying "not all men". The opposite phrase used was, "Yes all women". The significance of the phrase being that all women have to treat every random man as if he is a danger to them, regardless if "not all men" are dangerous. So the last line refers to those two phrases and twists them a bit to make a statement about how the narrator as a man can't even help or comfort her because we as men are forced to say "not all men will hurt you" instead of what we as men should be able to say: "yes men won't hurt you".
The last line of the poem is significant because of its use of two phrases. There's a common phrase men say that goes "not all men are..." and came about as a response to the feminist movement (though very recently). Earlier this year there was a shooting spree where a Men's Rights Activist killed and injured several people, and his reasoning for doing so was that women didn't pay attention to him and wouldn't have sex with him, among other sexist beliefs. This prompted an entire response to his words and actions from women and men alike, and a phrase emerged used by women who argued with men saying "not all men". The opposite phrase used was, "Yes all women". The significance of the phrase being that all women have to treat every random man as if he is a danger to them, regardless if "not all men" are dangerous. So the last line refers to those two phrases and twists them a bit to make a statement about how the narrator as a man can't even help or comfort her because we as men are forced to say "not all men will hurt you" instead of what we as men should be able to say: "yes men won't hurt you".
Whoops. I'll admit, I'm not terribly well-versed on anything to do with the Men's Rights Activists or resulting responses. *needs to do her research more often* Thank you for elaborating.
I got confused because I'm used to "all men" as a prayer ending. (I use "Amen," but I'm not sure which is more common.) So I was trying to figure out if the ending was saying something about religion. But that didn't make sense, since the rest of the poem didn't really tie into that.
So. Going back to the rest of the poem...
I like the way you use imagery. There are some unique comparisons, and the ready-to-bolt girl comes across very clearly. Poor thing.
I got confused because I'm used to "all men" as a prayer ending. (I use "Amen," but I'm not sure which is more common.) So I was trying to figure out if the ending was saying something about religion. But that didn't make sense, since the rest of the poem didn't really tie into that.
So. Going back to the rest of the poem...
I like the way you use imagery. There are some unique comparisons, and the ready-to-bolt girl comes across very clearly. Poor thing.
Oh I see. I'm not particularly caught up on the news but that incident stirred up a lot of unsaid feelings and was quite the news story for a while.
That particular image you mention was written by TwilightPoetess, this was a collaborative piece between me and her, just in case I hadn't mentioned that.
That particular image you mention was written by TwilightPoetess, this was a collaborative piece between me and her, just in case I hadn't mentioned that.