Comment on Death of a Muse by ~SSMcLeod

Oooo...O_o
Very dark and sinister.

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^w^..Kumagoro's hands go up to the sky..^w^

people do that? my word... well i've escaped it so far! my word... i'd go mad... you did a very nice job with this poem btw

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<sup>Keep away from people who try to belittle your ambitions.
Small people always do that, but the really great make you feel that you, too, can become great. - Mark Twain

~*~**Kristy**~*~</sup>

o_o... im frightened

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[J]uxtaposition [P]eace [a]nd [C]haos
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man i'm so bad in litterature :S

This piece honestly feels more like a rant than a poem; confirmed by the artists comment. If you don't like the comments people leave (and yes I know the terrible people you are talking about) then just turn off comments, I did this for awhile and found it to be quite nice. You can still have your friends message you critiques, but if you keep your critiques open, then it is you who is inviting those 'bad' commentors. Also, IMO it's a little annoying having sentences carry over into other stanzas, the point of stanzas is to serve as an unspoken break or transistion, therefore I don't understand why you are carrying your lines over.

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The early bird catches the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese.

i like the sentences going into other stanzas. i've always found definitive formulas and requirements for poetry pointless and i felt like this was a silent little stab at that. i'm probably not right in that interpretation, but oh well. either way, i like it quite a bit.

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"Taught me a lot of things. Like never manage a celtic rock band with a heroin addicted front man, a mentally ill fiddler, and the rest of the band comprised of constant drunks who are simultaneously egotistical and dimwitted."