Comment on Where do we go from here? by ~alexishelmsley

You sure write stories better than taking pictures. No offence ment!

I loved the story, and as I got to know you until now, I see that the main character has a lot from your personality.

Though it was a little bit wierd to read about character who had my name...

The strongest impression I got, is that this story reflects your thoughts and fears.
I think that at some points, all of us (women) have some of these thoughts.

Though it is simple languege, it is well written and easy to understand. I liked the way you described the situations, and as knowing that you are not a professional for writting, this passage could easily be part of romance book.

Maybe the whole thing is not my style, I generally read and love fantasy, but since I got to know you and I consider you as someone who can tell a lot of interesting stuff, I was not dissapointed here, and the ending of the story, intrigued me a little bit, whishing to know the continueation if there is such to fallow.

Good work over here.

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"First rock thrown again
Welcome hell you little saint
Mother gaia in slauther
Welcome to paradise soldier..." (Nightwish from 'Planet hell')

(I hope that you understand that I meen it cinicaly.)

thank you!

No offence was taken at the picture comment. I love to write, but I have to be properly inspired to write a story as meaningful and fluent as this!

To be honest, because the story is loosley based arround events that happened to me, I originally wanted the female Protagonist (main character) to be called Alexis. I then thought that it would be way too obvious, and called her Jenny after a very good friend of mine. But I do understand that its weird to read a story about someone who has the same name as you! (sorry about that! )

As for the follow on to this story, Im not too sure about it. There is a part of me that likes the current ending, because it leaves it open for the reader to create the follow on themselves - the reader gets to decide wheather Jenny and Shane get the 'Hollywood' ending.

However, there is a part of me that really wants to continue with the story as I feel that it does have potential. Although, Im concerned that if I were to continue with the story, it could leave the reader with a sence of disapointment, as the story may not develop as they would have wanted.

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Im untouchable, but im forcing you to feel me!

Welcome.

I am writting too sometimes, but it happens really rarely. I have many beginings to stories and no continueations, maybe one day...

Don't worry, thats ok, it was just a little bit wierd.

Yes, I agree with you.
As for now,I would lieve it as it is, and if you feel inspired you can try and write the continueation, and if you will like it you can post. Anyways it is for you to deside.

--
"First rock thrown again
Welcome hell you little saint
Mother gaia in slauther
Welcome to paradise soldier..." (Nightwish from 'Planet hell')

(I hope that you understand that I meen it cinicaly.)

Im sure that i'll let you know!

thank you so much!

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Im untouchable, but im forcing you to feel me!

Cool.

Welcome dear.

--
"First rock thrown again
Welcome hell you little saint
Mother gaia in slauther
Welcome to paradise soldier..." (Nightwish from 'Planet hell')

(I hope that you understand that I meen it cinicaly.)

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Im untouchable, but im forcing you to feel me!

i love this story... will you write more? lol

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|| BULLET || with your name on it

thank you!

Im not too sure that I will write something more on that one. BUt i will definately try to write some more in the future!

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Im untouchable, but im forcing you to feel me!

Excellent story Alexis..! You have a real "knack" for this sort of thing.. You should most certainly continue on Deviant, then on to a publisher!. I am serious... This is really good!..

Congrats on such a great story!