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Assignment: write a poem about a frog, with meter, that is NOT a limerick.

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I like it. One issue I see is the use of commas. You don't have to use them at a line break if there wouldn't be a comma there in a normal sentence. So:

I want you to be my Muse,
And to not abuse
The things I do for you.

I want you to give me
Everything I give to you,
And not anything more.

I do like the form you've constructed here, growing in complexity as you add lines to each stanza, and how it kind of follows a Bell curve. Although the next to last stanza isn't complex at all, so I'm almost tempted to suggest you break them out into three one-line stanzas. Or maybe two-liners, like:

I want you.
I thought you'd know.

I want you.
Don't you know?

I want you.
I want you to know!

(Note I'm in love with short declarative statements so that's why I put in more periods...)

I also have a question: have you ever tried to use consistent meter? It's more challenging, but it can help a poem flow.

THAT ALL SAID, I am far from a poetry expert and hardly ever write it myself :>
If I try to stick to a meter, it almost always degrades into limericks. :cry: I think I will toy with the layout of this a bit.

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I really wanna step up my writing though, and while I'd like to find the discipline to finish a book, or at least a few short stories, in the meantime I ought to polish up clear areas that need improvement. You always know how to motivate me. Arigato Senpai!

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Assignment: write a poem about a frog, with meter, that is NOT a limerick.

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Sweet jesus. lol

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