Comment on Fetish for GDD contest by nothingthere2hurt
Haha. XD There goes L showing his inner fangirl again. 
And just the grey tons doesn't look that bad. I know how hard it is to draw/color with a mouse. It sucks.
And just the grey tons doesn't look that bad. I know how hard it is to draw/color with a mouse. It sucks.
awww thanks! Glad you don't think it looks too bad you are an art student, and i really look forward to reading your comments on mine, honestly XD But yes, mouses (is the plural mice in this case? 
) are hard to draw with.
you are an art student, and i really look forward to reading your comments on mine, honestly XD But yes, mouses (is the plural mice in this case? ) are hard to draw with.Your welcome.
Though if you ever want an advanced critique you have to ask me for it. I look at a picture from a different frame of mind and I don't just say the positives.
Though if you ever want an advanced critique you have to ask me for it. I look at a picture from a different frame of mind and I don't just say the positives.
Say whatever you want 
I'll start adding at the bottom if I want your critique or not
The next picture, though, I DO want critique on, so I'm putting on photobucket... coz I want it to be as perfect as I can get it. I'll note you, is that cool?
I'll start adding at the bottom if I want your critique or not The next picture, though, I DO want critique on, so I'm putting on photobucket... coz I want it to be as perfect as I can get it. I'll note you, is that cool?
Yeah, sure you can note me about it.
And usually the best way to get critique is to ask me for it. Mainly cause it takes longer to analyze something, than to just say what I like about it. And I know that some people don't like getting critiques.
Um alright. For this comic. I have to admit that I actually don't know who Bill Kaulitz is, so a link to a photo in the artist comment would be nice to fill people in. On the artwork itself, I would try playing with the line weight a little more. It's all the same thickness. Try thing like making it heavier around the chin. Or thicker on the outline and thin in the middle. Doesn't matter but a variety adds more interest to a picture.
You also have a tendacy to draw limbs and fingers and such very straight and bubbly curved. But the human body isn't shaped like that. Try making areas slightly bigger around joints, like at the elbow and such. And it's try indicating the crease on bent fingers and such.
The third panel has a lot of white space, I would try and add something simple to the background.
For the text. The first line is a little repetitive.
"Just out of Curiosity" already says that he's curious about it so the side text "always been curious" is unnecessary. So maybe a side text like "It looks so stupid." would fit better since Raito likes to be petty.
For L reveling this secret, I would push his fangirl even more, add some hearts. And while Raito has a nice face response, maybe a comment or some sort would be nice too. Like "what about me?"
And usually the best way to get critique is to ask me for it. Mainly cause it takes longer to analyze something, than to just say what I like about it. And I know that some people don't like getting critiques.
Um alright. For this comic. I have to admit that I actually don't know who Bill Kaulitz is, so a link to a photo in the artist comment would be nice to fill people in. On the artwork itself, I would try playing with the line weight a little more. It's all the same thickness. Try thing like making it heavier around the chin. Or thicker on the outline and thin in the middle. Doesn't matter but a variety adds more interest to a picture.
You also have a tendacy to draw limbs and fingers and such very straight and bubbly curved. But the human body isn't shaped like that. Try making areas slightly bigger around joints, like at the elbow and such. And it's try indicating the crease on bent fingers and such.
The third panel has a lot of white space, I would try and add something simple to the background.
For the text. The first line is a little repetitive.
"Just out of Curiosity" already says that he's curious about it so the side text "always been curious" is unnecessary. So maybe a side text like "It looks so stupid." would fit better since Raito likes to be petty.
For L reveling this secret, I would push his fangirl even more, add some hearts.
And while Raito has a nice face response, maybe a comment or some sort would be nice too. Like "what about me?"I tried the hearts, but I can't do those. Not with a mouse at least XD
Honestly, thank you very very much I will remember these and use them for my next picture <333
Oh and here's Bill: [link] 2nd to the left
Honestly, thank you very very much
I will remember these and use them for my next picture <333Oh and here's Bill: [link] 2nd to the left
![[link]](http://s114.photobucket.com/albums/n260/XNT2HX/?action=view¤t=dreamuphs07003ddm2.jpg){kind=link}
Oh my, he looks like a girl. :gasp: Nice. XD And he does have great hair.
yeeeees he does xD but he's HOT 
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