Well I'm not sure what they're actually asking for. But overall all ur work is quite convincing and emotive. It always looks like what it is talking about (if that makes sense, lol).
Plus it's not Kitsch or overly simple (which is what my lecturers always seem to like). There's enough elements to create a strong personality, but it's still simple. I can't think of how to make something more "comical" than this is, and still look so classy
So well done, the teacher is probably not looking from the same point of view as me. Personally the emotional persona is the biggest thing, and this would bring that across even if all the elements are jumbled up and unreadable... it just has that "thing" lol... ya know