OOoohh.. Another fiction from you I wasn't aware of? I should really make my way up to those fanfictions plateforms one day ^^'
Still, I really like that beginning chapter, to be honest! I can't wait to read the next! You shouldn't be stressed about it, it's true that we can't please everyone (afterall, we're not a nutella jar!) but from what I'm given to read, it sounds pretty nice and interesting! (Maybe because I like your way of writing tensed situations but still!)