Comment on Hell's Kitchen,Chapter 2 by ~Tokogawa

Cool. You should post this on Fanfiction.Net

thanks,I was thinking of doing just that when its finished.

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The premise of this story is promising and the writing style is quite noir-ish. I particularly like how you portray Iroh just the way he is, and how you're using the "linguistic liberties" of DeviantART in regard to Zuko.
I personally think that the inclusion of Azula was a bit clumsy in that it remains unclear why she would visit the shop, my guess is that she has some kind of hidden agenda.

I'm sensing a Jack the Ripper vibe here, but I can't really judge yet. It goes without saying that any future chapters will be faved by ~InspectorIroh for all to see.

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Thank you, I know my inclusion of Azula was a bit clumsy,but I had to put her in. When she enters the General Qin Resturant,I wanted it to be coincidence.However, a hidden agenda in her head can develop in a second.I am glad for your comment and I will close up some loose ends eventually.

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