Okay, if I can be honest, I rarely read fiction. I also am not much of a fan of first person narration, but I will check back and read any further chapters you might post.
Sorry, I am probably not the best person to ask for feedback on short fiction.

I assume this is the story you referenced? I'll say that it's not "perfect", but that's a very subjective term. I'll also say that it works here! This story shouldn't be perfect. It's a journal! It should be all stream of consciousness, the highlights of a given day. You can never remember everything in a journal, believe me! I keep one on a regular basis and I don't come anywhere near. Conversations are rarely verbatim unless it's something important, like hitting on a hot girl. So use these little things to your advantage in writing. I'm always big on description, so definitely work that into your stories. Also, don't make it too easy for your narrator! Where's the fun in that? Really though, I think this could go places.

Now I'm going to go read your KP stories.

Pretty good.

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If we can't laugh, then our enemies win!

Very nice!

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FREAK ALERT

It's alright.

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A big belly is a happy belly. A small belly is just a cry for help.

Your belly: fill it up, watch it grow. Be good to it, and it'll be good to you.

Thank you!

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A big belly is a happy belly. A small belly is just a cry for help.

Your belly: fill it up, watch it grow. Be good to it, and it'll be good to you.

Thank you!

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A big belly is a happy belly. A small belly is just a cry for help.

Your belly: fill it up, watch it grow. Be good to it, and it'll be good to you.

Thanks for the tips!

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A big belly is a happy belly. A small belly is just a cry for help.

Your belly: fill it up, watch it grow. Be good to it, and it'll be good to you.

Oh, a pleasure.