Comment on Facing Hell WIP by =metalgoddess029[parent]

Well, you are defiantly going on the right path with your practice. Since I'm not much of a critique person with words I'll do it over in drawing if you don't mind.

If anything this is only going to end in greatness.

Well, if I'm getting somewhere and going the right way, then I'm happy so far.

One can only hope for greatness.

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I sees improvement.

Well, more than what I can do anyways.

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You're doin' it rite. The torso looks much better now. <3 He somehow looks a little stiff and uncomfortable though. I'll redline it when I get the time. Words fail me when it comes to critique. ;w;

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Thank you. I'm glad I'm getting somewhere. C:

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For you, the day Andromeda graced your small Siberian village was the most important day of your life. But for me... it was Tuesday.

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Okay, I drew it in to show you some things to keep in mind. Below are descriptions to the assigned number. You have very much the whole concept down pat there are just a few minor things to change. That's why I drew it out, otherwise what I'll be writing will sound strange (coming from someone like me).


1. Deltoids are import for determining how the rest of the muscles in the arm go as well as the muscles in the pectoralis Major (chest). The arm just needed a little more defining in the deltoids.

2. Judging from how the arms are positioned the biceps need to be defined just a little bit more as it will help you with the muscles in the arm further down.

3. Seeing how the arms expose the thumbs on the hand the Brachioradialis is what makes that line between where the arm and forearm meets when you bend. I only drew it in the check to see if the hand position would match with the rest of the muscles and it did so no worries there.

4. Lower the abs a bit to make room for the muscles of the diaphragm. Plus widen the upper body just a bit to go along with the side of his arms.

5. The abs. Yes, those are some nice abs. Not smudge stick like someone we know.

6. The Sternocleiodmastoid is a good neck muscle to have. I know your drawing as the m but I just drew it in for fun. Plus it helps with neck movement and it's placement to the Clavicle as well as the rest of the body from there.


Just tips and what not. Hope this can be of some use to you.



/will probably never critique again

But, we're getting somewhere. <3

Digi's helping me out too. <3

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For you, the day Andromeda graced your small Siberian village was the most important day of your life. But for me... it was Tuesday.

_{The Necromancer of Complaintopia}

Thank you for your help and this is something I can use. I'll put it in a notepad to keep on hand. <3

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For you, the day Andromeda graced your small Siberian village was the most important day of your life. But for me... it was Tuesday.

_{The Necromancer of Complaintopia}

Very nice and detailed!

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