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~ShadyTrader:iconShadyTrader: Mar 14, 2008, 8:53:53 PM
I honestly don't know, just work on the flow more for next time and use more comprehensive words and themes.

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~ShadyTrader:iconShadyTrader: Mar 13, 2008, 12:13:11 PM
Lololol its good...sounds perverted though. The only thing i would see wrong with this is that the syllables per line do not match very well. If they did match then it would flow a lot better.

Good work :D

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~Above-TheDeath:iconAbove-TheDeath: Mar 13, 2008, 12:41:56 PM
yeah i really have to work on that, i like writing poems. what would you give it out of ten?

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~ShadyTrader:iconShadyTrader: Mar 14, 2008, 8:53:53 PM
I honestly don't know, just work on the flow more for next time and use more comprehensive words and themes.

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Hows life?