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Apr 9, 2008, 1:20:52 PM
Apr 9, 2008, 1:20:52 PM
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"It took a moment before his pupils were able to adjust enough for him to see in the light, and zealously began to look around the first moment he got."
His pupils looked around the first moment he got? Maybe change the wording a bit?
"One of the hooded figures seemed to glance in Aiden’s direction, then took a terrible, slow step toward him in unison." - That's missing a "they". One figure alone can hardly take a step in unison.
I was a bit disappointed about the timejump, but I'll be keeping an eye out to see where the story will head next.
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"It took a moment before his pupils were able to adjust enough for him to see in the light, and zealously began to look around the first moment he got."
His pupils looked around the first moment he got? Maybe change the wording a bit?
"One of the hooded figures seemed to glance in Aiden’s direction, then took a terrible, slow step toward him in unison." - That's missing a "they". One figure alone can hardly take a step in unison.
I was a bit disappointed about the timejump, but I'll be keeping an eye out to see where the story will head next.
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Brand new club: ~traditionalmedia
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Only pointer I have is in the beginning of the first chapter you saythe last 3 years had been the same with maddie being strapped in and all, however maddie is only 2? so that is kinda weird.. otherwise, well done!
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keep it up!
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Morality, like art, means drawing a line someplace.
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"It took a moment before his pupils were able to adjust enough for him to see in the light, and zealously began to look around the first moment he got."
His pupils looked around the first moment he got? Maybe change the wording a bit?
"One of the hooded figures seemed to glance in Aiden’s direction, then took a terrible, slow step toward him in unison." - That's missing a "they". One figure alone can hardly take a step in unison.
I was a bit disappointed about the timejump, but I'll be keeping an eye out to see where the story will head next.
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I agree with you about the time jump, I definitely need to figure out a way to make the transition between Chapt. 1 and 2 more smooth. Any suggestions?
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