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Comment on Out of the Comfort Zone II by *XullraeZauviir[parent]

*XullraeZauviir:iconXullraeZauviir: Apr 12, 2008, 3:02:47 PM
I thought you might appreciate the dynamic of "two stories at once", however it is this double storytelling that made this story so long and difficult that I wasn't sure if anyone would read it because it might be confusing to follow.

Sometimes I do get tired of certain readers saying she is too complex or hard to understand so I thought this story might open her mind set a little more. :)

Thank you very much for your fav and support. :hug:

So I guess I'll post a longer piece next time and see if I'm right.

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=Bloodhia:iconBloodhia: Apr 7, 2008, 10:04:13 PM
Xull hiding her real HER seems very morbid. I like how she say that she need to kill. Hidden perfect villian.

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~BeowulfDoomhammer:iconBeowulfDoomhammer: Apr 7, 2008, 11:23:31 PM Mood: Joy
That last line was great. Reminded me of HK-47 almost, except Xullrae has more depth to her behind all of the violence.

"Explanation: It is my combative nature, master. I cannot help myself. I'll make it up to you... allow me to kill something in you honor.

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~BirkitaoftheAithne:iconBirkitaoftheAithne: Apr 8, 2008, 5:07:49 PM Mood: Wow!
(Hiding- a lovely word you can do so much when hiding!!!)
i loved it it shows how she strangles to become what people want her to be!!! but she still has her urges to kill coz thats wat she does and she cant get over it!!! relly good!!! well done
~Havoc892:iconHavoc892: Apr 11, 2008, 6:46:15 AM Mood: Happy
I like how you go back and forth, so to speak. You have two stories running here: What Xull is living and what Xull is thinking.

Though brief, I think this is a good snapshot at Xully in the modern world so far. I look forward to see how it develops.

And with any luck, I will have the sketch this weekend for your approval.

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*XullraeZauviir:iconXullraeZauviir: Apr 12, 2008, 2:39:55 PM
:devilish: :evillaugh: :nod:

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*XullraeZauviir:iconXullraeZauviir: Apr 12, 2008, 2:42:37 PM
Thank you. I was hoping to show depth. Xull'rae reminds me of a serial killer...I'm just trying to decide if she will be and if so what kind. :plotting:

I really appreciate the fav, this story has me on edge but favs boost my confidence! :hug:

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*XullraeZauviir:iconXullraeZauviir: Apr 12, 2008, 2:56:35 PM
Thank you! :bow:

Yeah hiding is an awesome skill! :dance: I wanted to show depth of character and that Xull'rae really isn't that complicated to understand. I'm glad it's coming across to readers that she has a wide range of emotions, it's that her primal reactions right now are the strongest. :devilish:

I'm pleased you like it.

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*XullraeZauviir:iconXullraeZauviir: Apr 12, 2008, 3:02:47 PM
I thought you might appreciate the dynamic of "two stories at once", however it is this double storytelling that made this story so long and difficult that I wasn't sure if anyone would read it because it might be confusing to follow.

Sometimes I do get tired of certain readers saying she is too complex or hard to understand so I thought this story might open her mind set a little more. :)

Thank you very much for your fav and support. :hug:

So I guess I'll post a longer piece next time and see if I'm right.

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Visit my RPG sites!
--The Roleplay Nexus Message Board
--Drow Campaign Descent Into Darkness
~Kail-odian:iconKail-odian: Apr 12, 2008, 6:47:12 PM
Knowing how drow are chaotic, I think your inner drow may be smiling now with how you think about this story. ;) It's an intriguing point of view, and both were parts so far were good to read. =)

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