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~metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 9, 2008, 7:23:35 PM
:blush: I appreciate that very much.

Devious Comments

*TheTrieckel:iconTheTrieckel: Apr 8, 2008, 10:04:57 PM
beautiful and very aggressive :nod:

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"I thought what I'd do was, I'd pretend I was one of those deaf-mutes"
~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 9, 2008, 4:29:03 AM
very intimate...
in the lines that go like
when we almost do, but never,
really touch.

shouldn't the second comma be after 'really'?
well on the other hand... maybe i just got things wrong there :shrug:
anyways, i delighted in reading this one! :heart:

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the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
~the-sohi:iconthe-sohi: Apr 9, 2008, 4:46:23 AM
I absolutely love it, coincidentally describes exactly what I am going through right now

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:meditate:
i ask of life,
not to be part of something, but to be part for something.
*TheTrieckel:iconTheTrieckel: Apr 9, 2008, 2:12:49 PM
:D

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"I thought what I'd do was, I'd pretend I was one of those deaf-mutes"
~metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 9, 2008, 2:20:32 PM
Those commas are definitely wonky, for sure. It probably isn't right theoretically but I did it that way to emphasize the intended flow as you read it. I probably did it wrong, though. haha

Thanks for picking up on it and thank you for reading, as always.

I like you Rob!
~foreverandher:iconforeverandher: Apr 9, 2008, 5:17:19 PM
I innocently pull you closer, finger
the follicles of your hair, running my nose
along the crook of your neck that swells so much

That part is fucking great. Very well done. I love the way you structured it, the way the words flow is orginal and unique
~metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 9, 2008, 7:23:35 PM
:blush: I appreciate that very much.