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Comment on To The Bone by ~merr-child [parent]

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"A man destined to hang can never drown." Regina Spektor

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I especially like the end of the poem, and I think it's well-structured.

I will say that I don't care for lines 2-4 because they sound ... generic. The rest of the words really stand out. Who knows, maybe I'm picky.

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The city is afraid of me. I've seen its true face.

Contests are cool.
I agree with Kyra (about liking the ending). You have a way of hitting people strongly at the end. Sadly this is how I feel a lot of the time, that the world has been ripped open and is dieing. *sighs*... going to the corner to be emo, bbl. XD

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Most women look for a knight in shining armor, I'm looking for a werewolf.

The last flicker of daylight calls to me, but yet into the darkness I walk.

.K.
The contrast in imagery is really awesome.

:hug:

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:looking up a suspect:
"Lloyd P. Nash." :laughs: "Wanna guess what the "P" stands for?"
"Is it pertinent?"
"Not even close."
- from "Due South"
[link] - Rubber ducks.
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"A man destined to hang can never drown." Regina Spektor
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"A man destined to hang can never drown." Regina Spektor

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