Wow, that's awesome. You have a great personal voice to your story, which many writers lack. It's really cool to read something like this. It kept me interested the entire time.
thank you. I know I have a great voice (all my english teachers tol me that ;-P), and im writing this from my point of view; so i would describe in detail things I see, and not things I dont. And yeah. That was the BEST...ENDING...EVER!!!!!1