Comment on some swordswoman by ~Kashikoi

Awesome to see from you.
Hmm..You named your major points, but it wouldn't hurt to hear again.

Good job on the anatomy (something we're both getting better at) and good shading. The hair seems...I don't know, like one big mass, rather than strands, if you catch what I am trying to say. Maybe you should...use more flowing lines?

Her right arm is bent, no doubt, but if you look at it from the wrist, you see that it looks stubby. Which means you didn't use enough shading or foreshortening to show the bendiness.

Clothes look nice, but try to put more flexibility in the vest. If its supposed to be like that, then show it more in the material, if possible. If not, no biggie. Just nit-picking.

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I like this one
the pose is cool

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You're right on the hair, it's mainly because of the way I sketched it out, although I tried to kind of make it more organic and flowing, but it still does look pretty stiff, huh?

Yeah, I didn't use heavy enough shading to show the foreshortening of the forearm, can't blame the scanner for that... I probably could still fix that though, huh?

I was actually going for a stiffer vest, although I should have shown a bit more thickness in the material now that I look back at it, since as it is it looks paper thin.

Thanks

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Thanks, glad it came out well!

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ooh, you haven't been idle while you've not been posting... this is pretty funky. great pose, and excellent anatomy... i like how you've indicated the muscles subtly. the angle of the sword's a little odd, but that's pretty minor overall. nice.

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Thanks for the comment You're right, the sword looks like it's blade-up; I intended to curve it the other way and shade it so it appeared blade-down, but alas without a straight-edge and the blunt pencil I was working with by this point, it came out looking off. Still, not enough to kill the overall piece.

ALSO I FEEL BAD I HAVEN'T COMMENTED YOUR WORK IN SO LONG D,: I'm commenting one of your pieces every day until I get everything I missed, dagnabbit.

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