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i like v mch :) especially d end

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I really like this one, and am as ever impressed with your vocab! am learning sooo many new words! :D
i like v mch :) especially d end
theres nothing too hard in here, apart from zirconium, i'm not sure, but i think its a chemical element, i just put it in... but thankyou.
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you always like the endings (blue tongue)
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Wow this is amazing and so true!!! There are a lot of big words though lol!!!!Still this rocks!

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An enemy stabs you in the back, a good friend stabs you in the front, a best friend pokes you with a straw.

Robyn: makes joke
Duty: Dies laughing
Robyn: Apologizes for killing duty until she herself dies
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big words, but you can still understand which is good :)
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hmm... this is my personal opinion, so please don't take offence!

I personally don't like this, as a whole. I love the end stanza, I think it's very well written and the rhyme scheme compliments this. However, I think that in the previous parts the rhyme scheme seems to limit this a bit...

But yeah, just a couple of thoughts from my mind, hope you don't take offence, it's not meant in a bad way, just some points you might find helpful in the future...

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ha yea I didnt think I would be able to understand it but the way you put it I do!!!!!!If that makes sense....Lol!

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An enemy stabs you in the back, a good friend stabs you in the front, a best friend pokes you with a straw.

Robyn: makes joke
Duty: Dies laughing
Robyn: Apologizes for killing duty until she herself dies
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its ok, one doesnt have to like everything. what do you mean by the rhyme limits it? should the structure be altered to make it flow better? je ne comprends pas tout...
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