I'm not sure if it's novel material - at the moment it reads like a beautiful character study. But yes, I think it is worth continuing.

(As someone who has trouble reading online I think I should warn you that not leaving open lines between paragraphs makes the text look crowded and unreadable - not a problem you;d have if I were reading it on paper.)

It needs some editing because sometimes the prose is not quite tight, but all that can be fixed once you have a completed piece.

Also, you could simply call it "an untitled peace offering", which I think sounds lovely.

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Thank you very kindly. I will certainly keep all of this in mind if/when I continue.

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"Proverbs for Paranoids, 1: You may never touch the Master, but you can tickle his creatures." - Thomas Pynchon, Gravity's Rainbow

Continue. Don't ever think twice. But remember that you have a special writing gift, not for novels, but for short and deep describing stories. Also for free poems.

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"What I want above all is to destroy the idea of culture. Culture is an alibi of imperialism. There is a Ministry of War. There is a Ministry of Culture. Therefore, culture is war."

Thank you very, very kindly for your words.

I don't think I was ever planning on making this a novel... I know I have no talent for drawn-out stories. Still, I'd like to someday publish a book of short stories and poems, perhaps. I simply don't know if what I write is worth reading enough to make it past an agent... I don't want to resort to self-publication. If I'm going to publish, I want to be read - I'd like to believe that I have something to say.

So, er, yes, that's where the book question came from, which I probably should have clarified. I have no plans for a novel. Ideas plenty, but none that I could draw out for that long.

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"Proverbs for Paranoids, 1: You may never touch the Master, but you can tickle his creatures." - Thomas Pynchon, Gravity's Rainbow