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Comment on 2. Love by =peterdawes

Excellent point, Peter. What is love but targeted abandon of sanity for the sake of single other?

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It is masochism and insanity but we could not survive without it.

"The lunatic, the lover and the poet are of imagination all compact"
“Lovers and madmen have such seething brains, such shaping fantasies, that apprehend more than cool reason ever comprehends.”
- William Shakespeare. Because we all know poets are right.

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Excellent point, Peter. What is love but targeted abandon of sanity for the sake of single other?

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Now faith is the assurance of things hoped for, the conviction of things not seen. -Heb. 11:1
Great poem, Peter. I absolutely loved the last stanza.
It's amazing how many good poems you manage to write on the same topic. When I think I've read all that's to read about your love for Her, you mange to surprise me with yet another excellent poem. You have my admiration.

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:O_o: I don't this is a sonnet...
at least not in the Shakespearian sense of the word.
It's suppoused to have the scheme -
ABABCDCDEFEFGG
And then have ten syllables in each sentence?

...I could be wrong...

^^; Great poem thing though.^^
Definitely a good flavor for a poem and well written. Some poets don't like constructive criticism...
I don't know though.
This poem reminded me of the God of Madness in a game I play - his name is Sheogorath. He'd likely agree with the ideals you have here.

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I am certainly open to constructive criticism. Do not hesitate.
No, definitely not a Shakespearian sonnet. I hesitated in using the sonnet model at all until I found this work: [link]

There are a variety of forms within the umbrella of sonnet. I am not certain how much the non-rhyming ones qualify, though. Whatever the matter, Pablo Neruda's sonnets are non-rhyming in English. (Perhaps they rhymed in his native language.) I'll cloak myself within his coattails. ;)

Thank you kindly for your thoughts and the favorite. :)

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"... forever yours, nocturnal me..."
I enjoyed this! Your view on love is very pessimistic, but true for today's world. Anyways, great poem. :nod:

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“A word of advice from one Reaper to another,” Kyniel took a defensive stance, “never let your ego get the best of you.”
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*chuckles* Pay no mind to the pessimist. I am currently estranged from my beloved. Very hard to see the daisies and the roses at the moment. However, I am glad the poem was still enjoyable. :)
Thank you for the favorite. :blackrose:

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:blackrose: immortal poet, occasional storyteller
poetry admin for *DailyLitDeviations
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"... forever yours, nocturnal me..."
No problem, and I'm usually pretty pessimistic myself just not in this area :XD:

Aw, I hope that is not a permanent thing.

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“A word of advice from one Reaper to another,” Kyniel took a defensive stance, “never let your ego get the best of you.”
The Realm Within
Why thank you. Coming from a gifted poet such as yourself, I consider that a high compliment. :)
Thank you for the favorite.

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:blackrose: immortal poet, occasional storyteller
poetry admin for *DailyLitDeviations
group owner for *VampireWriters

"... forever yours, nocturnal me..."
Now you're making me blush. :blush:
You're welcome.

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Don't Worry, Be Happy! Life Sucks Anyway.

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