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Comment on Mysticism by ~sharkoftheday [parent]

Just wondering, was the (main) message about progress (and escaping from it) obscure, evident, or somewhere in between?

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

*DarkPoetSociety / ~ poetic-forms / * livingpoetsociety

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Interesting imagery, I like this

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Please take this
And run far away
Far away from me.
I am Tainted
The two of us
Were never meant to be
All these Pieces
And promises and left behinds
If only I could see
In my
Nothing
You meant everything
Everything to me


NIN
This is gorgeous....damn. That struck something hard. Awesome work.
Keep it real.
~Sha~

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And if all the mistakes I made and all the pain I caused myself brought you back your freedom and happiness, I'd be out there shooting the system and bleeding for you...
:wow: Whoa, very impressive work. The exceptional imagery creats, sort of, an assortment of vignettes to compile one really awesome work. I like the desperate and forsaken feel I got from it; much of it anyway. Excellent poem!

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!Bad Bunnies! :ninjastar::jackdirt: !Bad Bunnies!
epic body of poetry, great work here. it reads nicely off the tongue. :+fav:
i only have time right now to read like the first quarter of it but its good stuff
Just wondering, was the (main) message about progress (and escaping from it) obscure, evident, or somewhere in between?

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

*DarkPoetSociety / ~ poetic-forms / * livingpoetsociety
Thank you, i'm hoping to write more in this manner (taking several hours/days). If i may ask, was the main message obscure, evident, or somewhere in between?

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To those who do not know me, I am but a faceless name writing insights to life that few will ever comprehend.
I refuse to be a slave to society and it's expectations.

*DarkPoetSociety / ~ poetic-forms / * livingpoetsociety
Evident, but not obvious... Which is good :D.

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!Bad Bunnies! :ninjastar::jackdirt: !Bad Bunnies!
Absolutely beautiful imagery. This is a great example of what great poetry should be like. It's evident that you spent an enournmous amount of time and effort here and it shows. This is beautifully written and the words just flow together completely. It's loaded with depth and meaning with a sense of mystery and challenge to try and figure out the message. This is unique and has a great mixture of creativity and is intellectually compelling. I can't say enough what a wonderful job you did on this piece I loved it! Absolutely lovely!!!

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~"You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough...~
~MidnightMoonlight16~

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