I get what you're saying and I'm trying to put more rules in it and ye I hate free verse because I suck at it lol it sounds like crap whn I read em more like a story than a poem so I've been adding syllabic rules and such the one I'm working on now will b abit better just having a tough time finding the rhymes while staying with the syllabic meter of 5 7 5 @_@ gonna do it in rhythm like A B A so far I have one stanza done tough finding rhymes with syllable limits lol
And ye I don't care for emotional poems right off the bat its a lot harder finding then right words to em within a structure and will just sound like crap in free verse so right now I'm writing about what I truly enjoy . . . Games lol check out my new one Capital Wastleland its not perfect but its my best one in my opinion the other 3 suck they were free verse and they were my 1st ones figured I'd keep em to show my improvement
And ye I don't care for emotional poems right off the bat its a lot harder finding then right words to em within a structure and will just sound like crap in free verse so right now I'm writing about what I truly enjoy . . . Games lol check out my new one Capital Wastleland its not perfect but its my best one in my opinion the other 3 suck they were free verse and they were my 1st ones figured I'd keep em to show my improvement
When I say rhythm I don't mean the rhyme scheme so much as the pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables. This is a problem that I could see with writing haiku's in English. Because the form was developed in a language so different from English, it doesn't really deal with stressed and unstressed syllables in the same way that a traditional English language form would. Also, rather than just rhyming you should practice with consonance, assonance, alliteration, etc. There are many devices which poets use to effect the way words are read and spoken. It's good to practice using them all.
Hmm thanks for the advice ill try to stick to it the best I can. Would it be ok if I note u with rough drafts and such? O:
I'm glad to help, feel free to send me drafts and I'll try to give you criticism when I can.
Kay and I want this thread shut off @_@ do u know how to? I sent a comment to fourteenthstar because I can't flipping send a note cause my blackberry is having issues after this new software update -.-