I've had this idea for a story in my head for a while now and I wanted your opinion on it.
The concept is that the story revolves a group of females mercenaries, kind of like a r63 TF2 only more diverse, which includes:
a Muslim team leader
an African-American techie who loves video games and dancing
a Chinese heavy weapons specialist with a speech impediment
a Jamaican strategist who's also a Brony, or Pegasister
and a tall blonde caucasian woman that specializes in subterfuge, on missions she wears a corset, fake breasts, and puts on a totally fake persona, when she's not on a mission or training she's usually either shopping, playing video games, or watching porn.
So what do you think of the concepts for the characters and story?
Sounds unique to me. Do you want to put this in comic format or in writing, only?
I read a bit of what you wrote after this, but I don't have time to write back to it right now. I know this is random and out of the blue, but I'm pretty good when it comes to story writing and character development, and since TP wants to be a jerk about it, I might be able to actually help you if you'd like. Send me a note with your ideas later on if you'd want.
What's wrong with this concept, I guess it isn't worded that great partly because I've never been good at explaining concepts on paper and it was really late at night when I typed it, but what's so bad about it?
Sta.sh
The concept is that the story revolves a group of females mercenaries, kind of like a r63 TF2 only more diverse, which includes:
a Muslim team leader
an African-American techie who loves video games and dancing
a Chinese heavy weapons specialist with a speech impediment
a Jamaican strategist who's also a Brony, or Pegasister
and a tall blonde caucasian woman that specializes in subterfuge, on missions she wears a corset, fake breasts, and puts on a totally fake persona, when she's not on a mission or training she's usually either shopping, playing video games, or watching porn.
So what do you think of the concepts for the characters and story?
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I read a bit of what you wrote after this, but I don't have time to write back to it right now. I know this is random and out of the blue, but I'm pretty good when it comes to story writing and character development, and since TP wants to be a jerk about it, I might be able to actually help you if you'd like.
Thank you so very much for offering to help me