Comment on Goodnight Saigon -Part Four- by Waltz-With-Me
I've read this and made some notes. I don't have time to write up a critique now this minute, but I'll get it to you soon. 
(I see you've taken my advice about the point of view headings in part 5, so no need to comment on that again.)
(I see you've taken my advice about the point of view headings in part 5, so no need to comment on that again.
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